TOEFL® essay: It is better to marry someone who is similar to you rather than...

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It is better to marry someone who is similar to you rather than who is different from you. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

For a successful married life a good relationship between husband and wife is very important. It does not matter what kind of nature husband and wife have. What matters is how much understanding they have. But in my view I would like to say for a happy, peaceful and successful married life both husband and wife should have the same nature. Therefore, I wanted a husband whose nature would be similar to me. By the grace of God I found such a man. My husband’s nature is almost similar to me. I would say it is better to marry someone who is similar to you rather than who is different from you. There are many reasons behind this. These are as follows:

In my opinion if a person marries with a person who has same nature then the chances of fighting and arguments will decrease. For example myself and my husband have the same nature therefore most of the time arguments do not occur and we do not fight. With the help of that our relationship finds strength. If we do not argue and fight then we can live in a peaceful environment. For success in life peace is important.

I would also like to say if husband and wife have the same nature then they can save money also. I have seen many families in which husband and wife have different nature. So whenever they go for shopping they purchase different things for their children and others. I think this is wastage of money. However the couple who have similar nature do not waste money like that. If a couple has different tastes of food then it becomes a problem. When a couple who have the same nature, go for outing eat same food while those having different nature is not possible.

If a husband and wife have the same nature they can take any decision of life very easily. If not then it is not possible easily. I have seen many families in which parents have different opinion. For instance a father wants their son should be an engineer while mom wants their son should be a doctor. In this situation they may argue with each other and create noise. People who do not want fighting and argument should prefer to get married with them who have the same nature.

Finally, I would like to say for a happy and peaceful life partner should be same natured.

[Alan]

My corrections are in CAPITAL LETTERS:

For a successful married life a good relationship between husband and wife is very important. It does not matter what kind of nature husband and wife have. What matters is how much understanding they have. But in my view I would like to say for a happy, peaceful and successful married life both husband and wife should have the same nature. Therefore, I wanted a husband whose nature would be similar to MINE. By the grace of God I found such a man. My husband’s nature is almost similar to me. I would say it is better to marry someone who is similar to you rather than who is different from you. There are many reasons behind this. These are as follows:

In my opinion if a person marries a person who has same nature then the chances of fighting and arguments will decrease. For example myself and my husband have the same nature therefore most of the time arguments do not occur and we do not fight. With the help of that our relationship finds strength. If we do not argue and fight then we can live in a peaceful environment. For success in life peace is important.

I would also like to say if husband and wife have the same nature then they can save money also. I have seen many families in which husband and wife have different natureS. So whenever they go shopping they purchase different things for their children and others. I think this is A wastE of money. However the couple who have similar natureS do not waste money like that. If a couple haVE different tastes IN food then it becomes a problem. When a couple who have the same nature, go OUT TO eat THE same food while those having different natureS THIS is not possible.

If a husband and wife have the same nature they can take any decision IN life very easily. If not then it is not possible. I have seen many families in which parents have different opinionS. For instance a father wants their son TO be an engineer while mom wants their son TO be a doctor. In this situation they may argue with each other and MAKE A LOT OF noise. People who do not want fighting and argumentS should MARRY THOSE who have the same nature.

Finally, I would like to say for a happy and peaceful life A partner should HAVE THE same nature.

Alan
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Hi Alan
Thanks alot for your efforts.
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