TOEFL® essay sample: Luck has nothig to do with success

[Geophysics]

when people suceed it is becuase of hard work Luck has nothing to do with success

"Genius is 99% hard work and 1% Luck," this is a well-quote from Enistein. some people believe that Luck is important to be success and the other believe that success is becuase of hard work. Personally, I belive that luck has nothing to do with success. Success is a resault of our attitude.

Many people may agree that the resault of hard work work is usually fruitful. For example, Thomas Adison tried 99 times to invet the light bulb without success but he didn't give up. On 100th try he suceeded. After this invention, he was asked didn't you think you were wasting your time ? He replied ,"In these 99 times I discovered 99 mistakes I had made".

Secondly, Success in one field relys on how much experience we have in this field , and the experience doesn't come without working. The more you work the more experience you get. For example researchers did and experiment on tow mice. They put the first in a maze and forced this mouse to move to find food. the other mouse was put in an empty tray and food is simply given to him so he didn't had to move to find food. After a while the discovered that the first became more capable of finding food than the other.

some people belive that luck plays a huge part in success. Somtimes luck may play a part in someone's success but this is not usually the case. Morever, hard work will lead you in astraight road unlike waiting for luck.

In conclusion, some people believe that success is a resault of hard work while other believe that luck is a big part of success and I agree with the first opinion. finally life is too short to wait for luck to get you anywhere.

would you please correct my essay and evaluate it ?

[Nguyen Lan]

Hi Geophysics,

I see some mistakes such as resault should be result; becuase shoud be because; you got some words mis-typed or mis-spelled. I am an English learner, thus I have just recognized a few mistakes from your text. I am also waiting for correction of the other members on your text in this forum.

Hoa Lan
P.S. If you see some mistakes in this message,
Please correct these for me, thank you.

[Pastortomas]

"Luck favours the strong" a loser would say to keep his ego intact. However, the winners would disagree since they are aware of the steps and struggle that lead them to victory. Hence, luck is often misinterpreet for coincidense or even opportunity; history and simple reasoning, though, guides to the true power of intense work.

Mark Spitz, Gandhi and einstein were passionate with their activities ( not just the ones concerning their field) and this love for life guided them to "miraculous" achievements. The passion for them was a great feelinf fulfilment and dynamic creativity but for the outsider they were hectic people with great anxiety. Then as this fruitful work and intense preparation was starting to draw attention opportunities were showing up one after the other and the progress was acceleraring. Einstein begun from a young age to discuss with many people interested in his work and knowledge. This mutual relationships progressed his quest in science and life even further. Now we start to see that success is more involved with our social skills and hard work rather with some supernatural force.

Even the so called "big" ideas from the idea of finding india by going perpedincular to turning the other cheek have some steps that led to them ;some conditions that fostered them. These ideas were developed from an intensive research which led them to many observations and even absurd ideas. Now ,of course, we can even
consider the subconscious incubation as a factor to success but not luck.

Even the ideal conditions that led to success are a product of our preparation and work. Bill Gate's success with the windows operator came to be with his observation that computers was an upcoming field. He just went to a potential field with many opportunities. But his hard work and determination ensured him a giant bussiness named Microsoft. The understanding of economical and at general life's cycles can lead us to the right conditions.

Luck is just an excuse for the weak that replaces the motivation for learning their mistakes and working intense to reform them with complaint. I believe luck must be excluded from our vocabulary,if we trully desire success.

comments are welcome

[Novito]

Hi,

Pastortomas, you write very well. Where do you come from?