TOEFL® essay: Some people like to travel with a companion. Other people prefer...

[Bubblysang]

Some people like to travel with a companion. Other people prefer to travel alone. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your

please Alan can you review my essay and please let me know your opinion.

Travelling is an enjoyable and wonderful experience.All people enjoy travelling whereas afew detest travelling an dprefer to stay at home.Many people like to travel with a companion or prefer to travel alone.I prefer to travel with a companion.

Travelling with a companion is more fun than travelling alone.We get to enjoy the experineces and have fun together.We can share the moments together.We are a family consisting of totally 6 of us including my parents.Wherever we go we go as a group.We have loads of fun as we are all together and we treasure those precious moments that we spend with our family as those moments cannot return.travelling with friend sis also fun.While travelling in a group we gain knowledge together.If I am in search of 1 thing then my companion will be in serach of another thing and we can share the information which we received.

travelling has to be fun and enjoyable.So I prefer to travel with a companion rather than to travel alone as it is boring to travelalone.

[Alan]

Travelling is an enjoyable and wonderful experience.All people/EVERYONE/EVERYBODY ENJOYS enjoy travelling whereas a few detest travelling and prefer to stay at home.Many people like to travel with a companion or prefer to travel alone.I prefer to travel with a companion.

Travelling with a companion is more fun than travelling alone.We get to enjoy the experineces and have fun together.We can share the moments together.We are a family consisting IN TOTAL of 6 including my parents.Wherever we go, we go as a group.We have loads of fun as we are all together and we treasure those precious moments that we spend with our family as those moments cannot return.Travelling with A friend is also fun.While travelling in a group we gain knowledge together.If I am in search of ONE thing, then my companion will be in serach of another thing and we can share the information which we RECEIVE/GET.

Travelling has to be fun and enjoyable.So I prefer to travel with a companion rather than to travel alone as it is boring to travel alone.

This is fine but perhaps a little short.

Alan
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