TOEFL® Essay: Universities should give th same amount of money both sports...

[Ovaisi]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Universities should give the same amount of money to their students' sports activities as they give to their university library.[b]

I do agree with this statement “ University should give the same amount of money both for students sport activities and for library. I believe in this because, both things are equally important for the student’s academic career: library give students a favorable place to study and to complete their assignments and sports activities give students good mental and physical health. Therefore, both things are necessary for a individual student’s academic career.

Library is one of the most important thing for a student’s academic studies. Every student needs a place where he/she can get a favorable environment for study and to complete their assignments. It is university administrations responsibility to provide students a good and spacious library. All the books material should be updated on a yearly basis, because every specific subjects of books like: science, arts , commerce are being updated very fast, every year there is a new edition of books have published, so the students requirements for books have changed very rapidly. University should have to spend a handsome amount of money every year in order to keep library in up to date condition and also fulfill the requirements of students.

Another basic requirement for a students academic studies is sports activities, both for mental and physical health of a students. Research shows that the intelligence of students not only dependant on how much a student studied, but it is also dependant upon how much a student active in sports activities. It is obvious that if a student good in studies then he/she also good in sports. Students who are not interested in sports activities may be encounter by some stress full illness like: high and low blood pressure, which affect on their mental health. In addition, If a student is not active in sports activities, it may also cause obesity which is bad for physical health; thus, it is a responsibility of university administration to provide students better places for sports.

To conclude, university administration should have to spend equal amount of money in both, sports activities and library ,if you take one thing out from a student academic career ,so it will be very harm full for the student. Sports activities and library both are the part of student life and both need equal attention and equal amount of money.

[Ovaisi]

hi Allan,
can you please take a look on this essay and correct the mistakes.
thankyou
Ovais

[Alan]

I do agree with this statement “ University should give the same amount of money both for students' sport activities and for A library. I believe in this because, both things are equally important for the studentS' academic career: A library give students a favorable/SUITABLE place to study and to complete their assignments and sports activities AND give students good mental and physical health. Therefore, both things are necessary for aN individual student’s academic career.

A Library is one of the most important thingS for a student’s academic studies. Every student needs a place where he/she/THEY can get a favorable environment for study and to complete their assignments. It is THE university administration's responsibility to provide students WITH a good and spacious library. All the book material should be updated on a yearly basis, because every specific subject of books like: science, arts , commerce are being updated very fast. Every year there is a new edition of books published, so the students' requirements for books have changed very rapidly.A University should have to spend a handsome amount of money every year in order to keep THE library in AN up -to -date condition and also fulfill the requirements of students.

Another basic requirement for a student's academic studies is sports activities, both for THE mental and physical health of a students. Research shows that the intelligence of students IS not only dependEnt on how much a student HAS studied, but it is also dependEnt upon how much a student IS active in sports activities. It is obvious that if a student IS good in studies then he/she IS also good in sports. Students who are not interested in sports activities may encounter some stressful illness like: high and low blood pressure, which affectS their mental health. In addition, if a student is not active in sports activities, it may also cause obesity which is bad for physical health; thus, it is a responsibility of university administration to provide students better places for sports.

To conclude, A university administration should have to spend equal amountS of money in both, sports activities and library ,if you take one thing out from a student'S academic career , it will be very harmFUL for the student. Sports activities and A library are BOTH part of student life and both need equal attention and equal amountS of money.

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Alan
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[Ovaisi]

hi Alan.
thankyou so much for checking my essay .
i have my toefl test on comming friday .
regards
Ovais