TOEFL® essay: People attend college or university for many different reasons

[Tulaja]

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Tulaja.

People attend college or university for many different reasons (for
example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge).
Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific
reasons and examples to support your answer.

It is true that people attend university and college for many different reasons.some of them are new experience ,career preparation and increased knowledge.Besides all these important reasons I would like to add some more points.And they are, 1:--University graduated students are highly paid. 2:--they visit to doctors and dentist periodically and themselves fit. 3:--The most Important point is,if the students are a women,they help their children in all the fields,for example -studies,sports and so many other thing,which indirectly help in growing worlds future.

My first point is University graduated students are highly paid.Yes,it is true.they get more salary as compare to non graduated students. And I have seen so many ungraduated people work really hard almost 50-55hours in a week,but still they are paid less.So some times its not about your hard working qualities.It is about your wise decision at right time.Students who have degree of graduation and diplomas are comparable.Graduated individuals work almost 40 -45 hours in a week but still they have paid good amount of money.

The second point i,they visit to doctors and dentist periodically and try to exercise at least 3 times a week.yes,this is true too. Most of the Population visit to doctors at least once in a year are the people who have attended college.The reason behind this is they know all the disadvantages and side effects of skipping the doctors views on their health.They also ask lots of questions and demand for the answers from the doctors.Their eating habits are healthy,they work out regularly.And they can do all of this because they have the confidence and they are ready to except the challenges in day to day life activities.

And my last and most important point is about the women who have attend schools .They says if one man from one family is highly educated he will make more money.But if one woman is highly qualified she can earn more money.In addition to that she can help her children in learning,and understanding things.I know it is heard for all those moms out there to work as well as manage house stuff.But they take all the pain in raising their children growing smart.And these children intend to have so many good skills and good basic knowledge.And this is how one highly educated women can help improving her county by growing worlds future smarter.

At the end I would like tell that going to college and getting all knowledge and experience helps a lot.So students out there please join the college.Get the university degree.And improve your skills.This is how we will be able to build the perfect world.

[Alan]

It is true that people attend university and college for many different reasons.some of them are new experience ,career preparation and increased knowledge.Besides all these important reasons I would like to add some more points.And they are, 1:--University graduated students are highly paid. 2:--they visit doctors and dentistS periodically and KEEP themselves fit. 3:--The most Important point is,if the students are women,they help their children in all the fields,for example -studies,sports and so many other thingS,which indirectly help in growing THE world's future.

My first point is University graduated students are highly paid.Yes,it is true.they get more salary as compareD to non-graduate students. And I have seen so many NON-GRADUATE people work really hard almost 50-55hours in a week,but still they are paid less.So sometimes its not about your hard working qualities.It is about your wise decision at THE right time.Students who have degreeS and diplomas are comparable.Graduate individuals work almost 40 -45 hours in a week but still they ARE paid A good amount of money.

The second point ,they visit doctors and dentist periodically and try to exercise at least 3 times a week.yes,this is true too. Most of the Population visit doctors at least once in a year are the people who have attended college.The reason behind this is they know all the disadvantages and side effects of IGNORING doctors' views on their health.They also ask lots of questions and demand the answers from the doctors.Their eating habits are healthy,they work out regularly.And they can do all of this because they have the confidence and they are ready to ACCEPT the challenges in day to day life activities.

And my last and most important point is about the women who have attendED schools .They says if one man from one family is highly educated he will make more money.But if one woman is highly qualified she can earn more money.In addition to that she can help her children in learning,and understanding things.I know it is HARD for all those moms out there to work as well as manage house stuff.But they take all the pain in raising their children growing smart.And these children intend to have so many good skills and good basic knowledge.And this is how one highly educated women can help improvE her counRty by growing THE world's future smarter.

At the end I would like SAY that going to college and getting all knowledge and experience helps a lot.So students out there please join A college.Get A university degree.And improve your skills.This is how we will be able to build the perfect world.

Alan
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[Jalinous]

This diagram illustrates a new technology to dredge for cleaning canals,rivers,etc.
As we can clearly see,this daredging boat composed of hydrolic arms,centrifugal pump,
rotating blades,a large tube and shuttle boat.
Based on the graph,the hydrolic arms lower centrifugal pump and rotating blades
into the canal.After that,the rotating blades stir up the mud,and centrifugal pump sucks
it through the large tube to the shuttle boat which is located behind the dredging boat.
When the shuttle boat full of mud,it will be towed out of the canal for dumping.
In general,we hope to use this technology for saving canal,rivers and cities like
venice without mannual interferences.

[Jalinous]

I will approciate you ,if you check my writing.
sincerely yours

Jalinous