TOEFL® essay: with the help of the technology, nowadays students can learn more...

[Bill06]

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topic: with the help of the technology, nowadays students can learn more information and learn it quickly

With the advanced technology, the students can learn much more information and more quickly than before. I agree with this view is because the technology has made students to get materials more easily and made complicated issues more simple to learn.

Firstly, the advanced technology has made students to get learning materials more easily. Today, the Internet has covered nearly everywhere. Students can access the Internet from school, home, and even when they are traveling in all over the world. Nearly All kinds of learning materials can be found in the internet right now. So the student can learn whatever they want in everywhere. The learning process is not longer limited into classrooms and students can learn things everywhere.

Secondly, the technology has made the complicated things more understandable. The modern technological tools, such as computer and soft wares, can make hard things to be easier. For example, the computer has made the images of every parts of human body from inside to outside and the computer can show step by step the construction of the body in an alive-like manner, which is impossible before, and with the help of the computer image, it has become much easier for students to learn the structure of human body.
Lastly, the high technology has saved a lot of time for students. Students can lean the textbook in electronic format from Internet, and in this way, they do not need to go to library to borrow or read there. By utilizing the saved time the students can learn more.

In conclusion, students can learn more things and more efficiently nowadays. The technology has helped to provide more convenient learning materials, has made the complicated-problems easier to understand and also has saved a lot of student’s time.

[Alan]

With advanced technology, students can learn much more information and more quickly than before. I agree with this view because technology has made students get materials more easily and made complicated issues more simple to learn.

Firstly, advanced technology has made students get learning materials more easily. Today, the Internet IS AVAILABLE nearly everywhere. Students can access the Internet from school, home, and even when they are traveling all over the world. Nearly All kinds of learning materials can be found in the internet right now. So studentS can learn whatever they want everywhere. The learning process is NO longer limited to classrooms and students can learn things everywhere.

Secondly, technology has made complicated things more understandable. Modern technological tools, such as computerS and software, can make hard things easier. For example, the computer has made images of every part of THE human body from inside to outside and the computer can show step by step the construction of the body in an LIFE-like manner, which WAS impossible before, and with the help of the computer image, it has become much easier for students to learn the structure of THE human body.
Lastly, high technology has saved a lot of time for students. Students can leaRn FROM A textbook in electronic format from THE Internet, and in this way, they do not need to go to THE library to borrow or read there. By utilizing the time SAVED students can learn more.

In conclusion, students can learn more things and more efficiently nowadays. Technology has helped to provide more convenient learning materials, has made complicated-problems easier to understand and also has saved a lot of time FOR STUDENTS.

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