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#2 (permalink) Sun Feb 03, 2008 7:52 am Does the text sound good? (Health Safety Programs are very expensive, but...) |
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. Long and convoluted sentences, especially when presented without relief, discourage readers from trying to disentangle meaning. Use the occasional simple sentence for emphasis and pause.
Health Safety Programs are very expensive, but they are worth implementing. If occupational safety requirements are unmet and the human factor ignored, the company can incur greater costs for legal prosecution, for compensation when an employee contracts an occupational disease or receives an occupational injury, and for payment for temporary incapacity due to disease or injury. Also, the company will probably have to pay employees who do extra work until new employees are found. Thus, the company’s image and reputation can worsen.
Actually, I fail to see any significant difference between 'for compensation when an employee contracts an occupational disease or receives an occupational injury' and 'payment for temporary incapacity due to disease or injury'. . _________________ Native English teacher at Mister Micawber's |
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#3 (permalink) Sun Feb 03, 2008 14:55 pm Does the text sound good? (Health Safety Programs are very expensive, but...) |
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| Mister Micawber wrote: | . Long and convoluted sentences, especially when presented without relief, discourage readers from trying to disentangle meaning. Use the occasional simple sentence for emphasis and pause.
Health Safety Programs are very expensive, but they are worth implementing. If occupational safety requirements are unmet and the human factor ignored, the company can incur greater costs for legal prosecution, for compensation when an employee contracts an occupational disease or receives an occupational injury, and for payment for temporary incapacity due to disease or injury. Also, the company will probably have to pay employees who do extra work until new employees are found. Thus, the company’s image and reputation can worsen.
Actually, I fail to see any significant difference between 'for compensation when an employee contracts an occupational disease or receives an occupational injury' and 'payment for temporary incapacity due to disease or injury'. . | Thank you very much, Mister Micawber!!! |
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