Paragraph: Some people may not be doing anything great in life. They may not...

[Daemon99]

Take a hedonistic approach to life.
Some people may not be doing anything great in life. They may not have any dreams, no zeal to achieve anything. They may not want to climb up any ladder of success. But they may be extremely happy and enjoying their life the way it is. I don’t call them losers. Some people may have big dreams. They may live most of their life, struggling to achieve them just for a few days of happiness at the end. I don’t exactly call them winners.

Can someone please review this paragraph and point out the grammatical mistakes, if any?
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[Alan]

Hi,

Just some additions to consider:

Take a hedonistic approach to life.
Some people may not be doing anything PARTICULARLY great in life. They may not have any dreams, no zeal (ENTHUSIASM) to achieve anything. They may not want to climb up any ladder of success. But they may be extremely happy and enjoying their life the way it is. I don’t (WOULDN'T) call them losers. Some people may have big dreams. They may live most of their life, struggling to achieve them just for a few days of happiness at the end. I don’t (WOULDN'T) exactly call them winners.

Alan
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[Daemon99]

Thanks a ton Alan.

But I was just wondering if there is a big difference between zeal and enthusiasm. On what occasions should we use each of them?
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I intend to live forever - so far, so good.

[Alan]

Hi,

It's probably just me! I find 'zeal' a rather obscure word and I don't believe it is used very often but my offer of 'enthusiasm' is just a suggestion.

Alan
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