TOEFL® essay example: Public transport

[Sherifatbidemi]

Public transport are means of tranportation for every individual in a society irrespective of race, gender, ethnic or religious background. The transport is either through taxis,train or buses. Public transport has numerous advantages, which are stated below: Firstly, it is cheap, affordable and accesible anyday, anytime, to the public . Unlike a private transport which has to be finance by the owner. He/She need to buy fuel and take security check on the vehicle. This also leads to the fact that the responsility of maintaining and financing vehicle lies in the hands of the owner. Secondly, Public transport is a means of relieving traffic congestions. This is because it can accomodate so many passagers. Thirdly, it a means of controling air polution in the environment. Because the numbe of vehicle is much reduced. Furthermore, Public transport serve as a means of entertainment and interaction among the passangers. People relates with each other. This make travelling enjoyable and memorable. In summary, Public transport is very important in every nation and should be advocated because it creates equality among individuals and reduces the rate of congestion on every road. Please I need some corrections. Thank you.

[Kitosdad]

Good morning Sherifatbidemi. I've skimmed through your essay, and it is nowhere near as good as your previous one, although you have done justice to the theme.

You have a good command of the English language, and your sentence structure is very good.

It's early here in Germany and I have to go out with my dogs for their morning walk.
I will do a little work on your essay when I return.

By the way, I wouldn't consider a taxi as public transport. True, it is available to all members of the public, but it does not contribute in the lessening of congestion on the roads.

Bye for now.

Kitos.
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Englishman living in Germany.

[Kitosdad]

The term" Public transport " describes a means of transportation for every individual in a society irrespective of race, gender, ethnic or religious background.
The transport is in the form of either trains or buses. Public transport has numerous advantages, which are stated below:

Firstly, it is affordable and accessible any day, and at most times to the public, unlike private transport which has to be financed by the owner. He/She needs to buy fuel and to take responsibilty for the road-worthiness of the vehicle.They also need to ensure that the vehicle is taxed and insured. This also leads to the fact that the responsibility of maintaining and financing the vehicle falls on the shoulders of the owner.

Secondly, public transport is a means of relieving traffic congestions,due to the fact that it is able to accommodate a great number of passengers. Reducing the number of vehicles on the road has the effect of reducing the amount of air pollution on the environment.

Furthermore, public transport serves as a means of entertainment and interaction amongst the passengers. People relate with each other. This make travelling enjoyable and memorable.

In summary, public transport is very important in every nation and should be advocated, because it creates equality among individuals and reduces the amount of congestion on every road.

Kitos.
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Englishman living in Germany.