TOEFL® essay sample: Parents are the best teachers...

[Abbildung]

Hello,

could you guys please correct my toefl essay?
thanks!

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Parents are the best teachers.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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Nowadays a good education is one of the most imporant factors for anyoe who wants to
successfully handle all the competitions occuring in once lifetime. In this essay i want
to explain why i think parents are the best teachers among all educators.

Children spend the most of their time during the childhood with their parents. Thus
parents can influence and teach their children like no other person can do. When children join
the school they already have received their basic knowledge and the teachers at school have to
put their expertise upon this basic knowledge.

Since children spend so much time with their children and their naturally given respect for
their parents they will listen carefully to their parents advices. Usually no other person will
ever be able to get a similar level of authority like parents have.

Probably the most important point that makes parents the best teachers is their love to the children.
This love will lead to a great devotion while they teach their children making them the most
patient teacher one can imagine.

Because of all these points i think parents are the best teachers and can even teach their
children better than any professional educator with a lot of expertise.

[Alan]

Hi abbildung,

My comments are in CAPITALS:

[Nerry]

would you please someone correct my TOEFL sample essay?

Thank you very much..

Nerry.
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Parents are the best teachers.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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Here speaker asserts that parents are the best teachers which one can ever have in their life. I partly agree with the statement since in some cases I would not recommend that they are the best teachers.
When we think of our childhood, our parents have the authority to control us. They are the people who decide what we should have and shouldn't. In that case they are over controlling us. Actually, getting experience is the best way to learn ,but we can not do our own researches to get to know new things since our parents over protecting us. As a example they not allow us to go and play in rain or in road. It may control our selves getting risk in future. In that case we can not claim that our parents are not the best teachers.
On the other hand , they are the people who teach us good qualities that person should have through out the life time. To be a person who have been respected by the society one must have good qualities like kindness, honesty, forgiveness,genuineness etc. children can easily be addicted to drugs, alcohol etc. Also they would practice bad behaviors like steeling and quarreling, if they were not correctly guide. Parents are the best teachers who can teach us what is good and what is bad. They are the people who move more time with us at our young age. So they can teach us many things not even good and bad, but also they can help develop our skills. In that case more educated parents would be great teachers if they could move more time with their children.
Considering all the points and examples stated above I would say that parents are good teachers to a some extent, but they are not the best.

[Nerry]

would you please someone correct my TOEFL sample essay?

Thank you very much..

Nerry.
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Parents are the best teachers.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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Here speaker asserts that parents are the best teachers which one can ever have in their life. I partly agree with the statement since in some cases I would not recommend that they are the best teachers.
When we think of our childhood, our parents have the authority to control us. They are the people who decide what we should have and shouldn't. In that case they are over controlling us. Actually, getting experience is the best way to learn ,but we can not do our own researches to get to know new things since our parents over protecting us. As a example they not allow us to go and play in rain or in road. It may control our selves getting risk in future. In that case we can not claim that our parents are the best teachers.

On the other hand , they are the people who teach us good qualities that person should have through out the life time. To be a person who have been respected by the society one must have good qualities like kindness, honesty, forgiveness,genuineness etc. children can easily be addicted to drugs, alcohol etc. Also they would practice bad behaviors like steeling and quarreling, if they were not correctly guide. Parents are the best teachers who can teach us what is good and what is bad. They are the people who move more time with us at our young age. So they can teach us many things not even good and bad, but also they can help develop our skills. In that case more educated parents would be great teachers if they could move more time with their children.

Considering all the points and examples stated above I would say that parents are good teachers to a some extent, but they are not the best.

[Mardomaneazad]

"im hadi and 35 years old . i want to talk about music and its role in my life.generally i dont fan of especial music and have no plan that when lesson to music, moreover i havnt more time to lesson to it."
please check my essay and tell me is that correct?

[Nzuahp]

Hello Mardomaneazad,

I cannnot see the essay you are talking about. Do you mean what you have written above is an essay? If yes, you still have a lot to do.

Nzuahp.

[Mardomaneazad]

hi Nzuahp
youre right i try harder to write a real essay please help me

[Nzuahp]

Hello Mardomaneazad,

There are so many sample essays that have been written in this forum.
Just browse through them, reading and following the layout that has
been used to write them. If you do this, very soon you will start writing good essays.

Nzuahp